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Re: Happy Christmas!
Happy Christmas, everyone! What? It's on its way...I sold some Christmas cards at work last week, and some selection boxes :)
Sep 28, 2007 -
Re: iPod video nano
An iPod Touch would be snazztastic. However, I love my red 8gb Nano :)
Sep 25, 2007 -
Re: test
Let's commandeer this thing :twisted: :piratedthread:
Sep 20, 2007 -
Re: Behind My Brown Eyes
Again, well-written. Again, not the most original idea, but still. I particularly like your imagery in the second-to-last stanza. Keep writing.
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Good Enough
This is by no means an original idea, it is rather cliché, and you should experiment with your writing style to make it your own. That's not to say that ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Hope Springs Eternal
I liked this. I liked the structure, it kept in line with the format, and wasn't at all forced. A well-written piece.
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: No Title Yet
This has a lot of potential. Let's go through it. he fell down she offered a hand he hit the ground she helped him stand I liked this stanza - ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Worth It?
I find the concept somewhat cliché and overdone. The ending came suddenly and unexpectedly, and disappointed me a little because this kind of poem has been done so many times. ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: The Paschal Four
April? I'm beginning to think people are afraid of critiquing long poems ;) As am I *blush* You have a very distinct style, which I like. Your imagery is good ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: ether
This was well written. However, I am guessing the reason why it has yet to be critiqued is that it is rather long, and a little difficult to "get". I ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Mortal Nemesis
*Gasp* 9th of May? Why hasn't this been critiqued? Shame on you, YWS! Anyway, I liked this. It flowed nicely, the rhythm is good, and I like the concept. However: ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Your Little Son
wow, I adore this. Great concept, great tone, well written. Just a few suggestions: This is a letter to my father, A letter to my mother. This a letter to ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: If the Threads in Our Clothes
I love this concept, and I think the repetition of questions works really well. The only thing I would say is that the last couple of lines in each stanza ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: Untitled
I generally don't like second person narrative very much, and find it difficult to write, but this wasn't too bad. "Drown in your own sorrows" seems a little cliché/overused...but then, ...
Sep 19, 2007 -
Re: uploading pictures
You mean you can just see the edges because your posts are in the way? Someone correct me if I'm wrong, but I'm not sure that can be changed. Also ...
Sep 18, 2007
